What's SO INTERESTING about LOBSTERS?

               So, here I am again writing about the trials of Mrs. Gilman's class, and talking about the poem, Lobsters. One interesting idea that was brought up by my fellow classmate Levi was the idea of a slave trade metaphor within the poem. I pondered this and this is what it meant. Basically, the slave trade was a huge part of the 1800's and early 1900's and anytime before, where people could come and choose which slave they wanted, and purchase that person. Now, is this just an idle coincidence? Or, could this be a way of expressing that we, as humans, are STILL practicing the slave trade without even thinking about it.
                This theory can be applied to many parts of the poem. Such as when the author talks about their colors, and how they are "velvet". But tell me, do these colors sound beautiful and awe-striking to you? Mud red, cadaver green, and bruise purple? Well, they may be awe striking, but in the other way... So, anyway, whit I'm getting at is that the author is trying to say that while the lobsters are beautiful when they are at their home on the bottom of the sea, but when we bring them here to buy and sell, they are considered odd, or weird. Now, we all pretty much know that Slave owners were white, and the slaves themselves may have been African American, Latino, or any race besides our own. And that was much like this. The slaves were not like the whites, so they found them odd and put them on the market, which is just an absolutely terrible and disgusting thing to do. Which, is what the author is trying to convey. That we have a fear of the unknown, so much so that we put it on the market and sell it to the highest bidder. So, is the slave trade still occuring, well no. But, it is with Lobsters, and other animals.
              

5 part paragraph critique.

In my class, there wasn't many actual BAD papers, but there were some tiny little issues. I think the biggest problems in our class was mainly word choice, and transitions.

              The main problem with word choice was that it was kind of weak. Also, it seemed like a lot of people didn't actually know the meanings of the words they were using, and they just threw them in there because they sounded, "intelligent". This was pretty ridiculous because I felt that it completely took away from the flow of some papers and made it seem like people just put together a collage of 5 syllable words. People should try writing for themselves instead of just trying to impress everyone.

               The only other big problem I found was transitions, in that a lot of people didn't use them correctly, or they didn't use any at all. I mean, it's in the format we were supposed to use to write, so why did people forget about them? We had a list of them in front of us! And I want to clarify, it seems as though I'm bashing EVERYONE in the class, I'm not. As I said, most were really well written. But the few that weren't, were not written well at all!

                As for me, I felt like I did well, but also messed up. For instance, I used this shows, when it was in the rubric telling me not too. So, I guess it is a little hypocritical for me to get on people for transitions, when I didn't follow the rubric either. Oh well, that's just how the story goes.